tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7445572323133363805.post1180366553228521205..comments2023-05-31T05:04:36.340-05:00Comments on Unconventional Wisdom: Willie, Part IIAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12704003344923624770noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7445572323133363805.post-58834888049732364912013-04-22T23:53:14.135-05:002013-04-22T23:53:14.135-05:00Okay, I know you really want it, so...
Your dialo...Okay, I know you really want it, so...<br /><br />Your dialogue is so good. I can hear them. I can especially hear the dad. And the lead up to the big reveal is great. You don't rush it for the sake of just getting there because you think you have to. And you don't bore us to death. It moves. I'd say my only tweaks would be to maybe italicize the dad's quote at the beginning as a thought. And just ditch the final paragraph. It's too obvious. The rest is just beautifully telling and subtle.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18427562250034222584noreply@blogger.com